Many families force their beliefs onto their children as if they are born into a certain belief. They are raised, many their entire lives, in that faith and as a result are restricted from exploration due to set limits. Schools represent particular faiths and educate their students in that one religion. Evolutionary perspectives are taught within the educational curriculum. Although it may not be considered a religion, evolution is still a belief. These narrow-minded influences are hindering the curiosity of the naïve who need to discover faith on their own. Faith is and independent practice, not a group activity.
No matter where it comes from, outside influence on faith needs to stop. Stop the belief brainwashing! I personally can't stand it. People should understand that every individual is born with the right to hold their own views without external influence. Because he topic of faith is so sensitive, it should be implied that it is also personal. If people are so touchy regarding their own religious beliefs, they should respect others' opinions. How would they feel if the reciprocal action occurred and their beliefs were questioned. This concept applies to all systems and individuals including but not limited to schools, families, and friends. Give people the chance to explore and expand their minds, opinions, and beliefs. Therefore every individual has a right to their own beliefs, and in this I strongly believe.
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I think it's great that your so passionate about the belief you describe in your essay. The only small typo I saw was in the 5th sentence of your second paragraph, you have "he" instead of "the" and in the 7th sentence in that same paragraph, I think you need a question mark. Otherwise, I think it's a really strong essay.
ReplyDeleteI really like your essay and I think you have a strong voice all throughout, but I would like to see some sort of a story. I don't think it has to be a personal narrative, but I think it would be that much better if you went more in depth with a hypothetical situation, maybe in your second paragraph. Other than that, I love it!
ReplyDeleteI really like that you touched on religion in this essay. I honestly believe that all religions lead to the same thing, the end of life. And what happens after that is up to what you believed in.
ReplyDeleteDid you ever have a personal experience referring to the topic you wrote about?
ReplyDeleteNo. Its just something that Ive always believed in
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